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In writ­ing news, I fin­ished the first draft of the PB. It’s in at 767 words, which is 267 words over tar­get. The set up is too long any­way, so it’s a good can­di­date for par­ing. The lan­guage is rough, of course. The biggest prob­lem is voice. There’s a POV shift in one para­graph, and I lost the voice at the end. The first close edit of the MG fan­tasy is com­ing along. Chap­ters 1–12 have been line-edited for struc­ture and voice, and those pesky dan­gling plot lines are get­ting the ax. I’m try­ing to cut this draft down from 45k to about 30k words to fit its audi­ence. That means remov­ing a lot of inter­nal mono­logue, which is always fun. Finally, I’ve got­ten back on track with the cur­rent YA, meet­ing my word quota for the first time since Wednes­day. No word on any submissions.